Friday, October 14, 2011

Someone Read my essay and crtique it...?

Someone Read my essay and crtique it...?
Born in 1901 Florence South Carolina, William H. Johnson grew up in a poor family of seven being the eldest child. Without any money and Johnson was limited to the skills that were hidden within him. Johnson at an early age discovered that he had strong abilities to draw. Using these drawing skills to his advantage he started to create penning cartoons for local newspapers. With the help of this and a variety of jobs, he was able to save enough money to pay for the art education program at the Prestigious National Academy of Design in New York City, where he moved at the age of seventeen in 1921. His teacher Charles Harthorne helped Johnson throughout his years and helped him get into the Cape Cod School of Art in Provincetown, Massachusetts during the summers of 1923 to 1926 where he graduated. Johnson did not have the supporting type of family when growing up. His mother was black with a Sioux ancestry and his father was white. His father had never supported him in his life, and was not looking forward to the goals he had. Johnson had never given up, winning the Cannon prize in 1924 and 1926 and the Hallgarten prize in 1925. In 1926 Johnson moved to France in search of a better life with more Opportunities. There he met a weaver; Holcha Krake in 1930, before marrying her, Johnson went to South Carolina. In South Carolina he was thrown in jail, because he painted a brothel known to him only as the Jacobia Hotel. Returning to Denmark he married and lived with Krake for the next eight years in rural areas of Denmark and Norway. During these years he sold paintings until he was employed as a mural painter for the WPA. While employed he learned art techniques such as silkscreening. Some of his paintings were silkscreening, like the Going to Church, Jitterbugs, and the Street Musicians. Some of his other works are oil on canvas and oil on board paintings, such as Minnie, Landscape with the sun, and Lamentation. During World War II he moved back to New York City to get away from Nazism. Johnson moved back to New York just to find himself in even more problems. Interracial marriages and the horrid depression were obstacles to live with. During his time in New York City, Johnson taught at the Harlem Community art Center around 1940. In 1944 his beloved wife Holcha died from breast cancer. Following KrakeĆ¢€™s death, Johnson was deteriorating. He spent twenty-three years of his life in a state hospital in Long Island, New York. Johnson died April 1970 due to physical and mental health problems. William Henry Johnson was a well educated man. He went through thick and thin during his years of life. He lived a hard childhood, but managed to make it through during his teen and adult years. His great fortune was not money, but his creativity and ability to draw. Johnson was one of the greatest artists during the Harlem Renaissance period.
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It is an excellent story. I would suggest that you slow it down somewhat and make clearer breaks between topics. You might break it into more paragraphs. The conclusion worked well for me. It summarized the story well without duplicating detail. I am not a writer but the painting names should have quotes or something. If you are preparing the document in Word, they have a grammar feature that gives readability statistics. I have personally found it to be helpful. Good luck!